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Husanto
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Posted: Sun Mar 15, 2009 11:33 am
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Hi all,
I'm is a newbie in affiliate marketing. I already make a landing page for promote affiliate product. Please give me a feedback for my site good or not??
My site http://www.learnmoneymachines.com
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faridaziz
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Posted: Thu Mar 19, 2009 4:05 pm
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Husanto,
Nice effort.
You see, making money online is about testing,
tweaking and making improvements. And you have taken
the first major step. Congrats.
Here are my opinions:
#1
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I'm aware that English is not your mother language,
so please be careful with your copywriting.
A poor grammar is a suicide when it comes to
copywriting, because you have to PUSH that hot
buttons of your readers.
If you cannot do the task, perhaps you can
outsource it?
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I personally think that your landing page is using
TOO many bright colors.
They are all over the page and makes it difficult for
visitors to scan for important information.
(yes, people scan landing pages, not read them)
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Your landing page acts as a sales letter also?
A good landing page should only have ONE target.
>>> Get visitors to opt-in to your list
I see that your page also has links to the affiliate
product you're promoting. This is distracting...
To Your Success,
Farid
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Husanto
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Posted: Thu Mar 19, 2009 4:14 pm
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Hi Farid,
Very thanks for your reply.
It's true, my grammer is bad. Thanks, i will to correct it. Nice to meet you Farid...
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Husanto
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Posted: Thu Mar 19, 2009 4:30 pm
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Hi Farid,
Can you help me to show me the wrong grammar in my site?? Very hope you can help me...
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faridaziz
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Posted: Fri Mar 20, 2009 12:02 am
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Well, I don't think we can discuss it here and
that will be me tweaking your landing page 
I just don't have the time, sorry.
But it's not just the grammar... it's the copywriting.
Cheers,
Farid
P.S. One example of a grammar mistake is your forum signature..
You write "... Not Experience Needed"
It should be "...NO Experience Needed"
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Husanto
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Posted: Fri Mar 20, 2009 11:23 am
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Ok Farid,
I know you very busy now but I will to say thanks for you comment. Nice to meet you...
Thanks
Husanto
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